Hi...
I think it is very difficult to add comics features to "4:48 Psychosis", because the risk ,as Iain says, is to produce a caricature.
On the other hand, opposed cut, played on madness' /hysteria, is likely to become nonsense delirious , which does not merit the work.
The hard work in "4:48 Psycosis" is to create a dynamic-unicum, which is explained to the public but when the work is represented.
I suggest ... help with video, with dance or physical-theater controscene,that may add l details and amplify the central scene.
Good job.